Thank you for your application. Upon reviewing it, we've determined that we need a little more information before we can make a final decision.
Much of the Personality section reads more like a review of Nita's history, and we want to see more of how Nita's actions or feelings during those events reveals who she is. Please provide some elaboration on the dynamics of Nita's interpersonal relationships, such as how she is impacted by their development (especially the more unlikely or unusual ones), and how she is affected by the loss of loved ones. How does this loss, for example, impact her relationship with her sister and Kit? How did she befriend Esemeli/the LP on Alaalu? How did that "wizard's holiday" affect her and her understanding of other species' cultures? How did she deal with Pralaya's betrayal? How did the Song of the Twelve and willingly going to what she thinks is her death shape her during her wizardly infancy, and how does she feel about Ed'rashtekaresket versus her relationship with S'reee? How did the threat of the Pullulus and the search for the Hesper help her grow as a wizard?
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Much of the Personality section reads more like a review of Nita's history, and we want to see more of how Nita's actions or feelings during those events reveals who she is. Please provide some elaboration on the dynamics of Nita's interpersonal relationships, such as how she is impacted by their development (especially the more unlikely or unusual ones), and how she is affected by the loss of loved ones. How does this loss, for example, impact her relationship with her sister and Kit? How did she befriend Esemeli/the LP on Alaalu? How did that "wizard's holiday" affect her and her understanding of other species' cultures? How did she deal with Pralaya's betrayal? How did the Song of the Twelve and willingly going to what she thinks is her death shape her during her wizardly infancy, and how does she feel about Ed'rashtekaresket versus her relationship with S'reee? How did the threat of the Pullulus and the search for the Hesper help her grow as a wizard?
You can provide these revisions in a reply to this comment or by amending your original application. If you do the latter, please identify the amended information with a different font colour, style, or heading within the app, as opposed to writing over the noted sections. You have 72 hours to provide these revisions in order to be considered during this application cycle. If you require additional time due to extenuating circumstances, please contact the mod team.